Story Start Nov 2015 “The girl of the sea”

girl in the sea

Lots of new writers joined us this time, welcome one and all. Please leave a comment let us know what you think.



One day there was a young girl called Lucy age 7.

She was having a swim until she suddenly… She drowned but she could breath under water just like a shark. She stayed under water forever but people said they saw her. Some people thought she was dead no one ever found the body. A 10-year-old boy called James knew what had happened a new species a vampire shark he said its name was a vompshark that he made up had bit her. She wasn’t dead she lived like a shark for ever she never died. She is still living today. James was the only person who knew because no one ever believed him.

Age: 8




This little girl lives a normal life with a normal family but what they don’t know is that this young girl is aqua girl a brave and fearsome girl she protects the seas with her life but one day an old friend showed up in a bad mood he came with an army of bull sharks tiger shark’s great white sharks and a couple of megaladons “you shall bow to me” said the giant thing in the ocean the little girl called the strongest fish around to defend the rest of the fish the little girl was hit and knocked out but she woke after the fight it was the same as before the fight “we won yeah” the man was nowhere to be seen but he said “ I’ll be back soon and when I am you’ll pay” then the man ran off in a hurry the fish gathered round and said thank you.

Age: 10



There was once an eleven-year-old girl called Jenny. One day, something strange happened, her fourteen-year-old brother Joshua went scuba diving. When he didn’t return home that night, Jenny’s parents got worried and went out looking for Josh. Jenny wanted to look for him too, but nobody would let her. Jenny had a secret power that nobody knew about, she could breathe under water. The following day, Jenny sneaked out to look for her brother in the sea. It was very scary and dark underwater, but Jenny kept on searching, using a lantern to light the sea. Eventually she found him lost in a secret underwater cave. “Jenny, you’ve found me!” Said Josh!” Do you know the way out?”

“Follow me,” she said. She led him home and they got dry. Afterwards Jenny told them all about her special power and they were very happy together!

Age: 9



As the girl stands above the sea the frothy waves splash, she wonders what it would be like being amongst the fish and the seaweed. The girl (only 8) lives in a poor part of London, she can’t cope at home, with her arguing, her brother always causing trouble. She is the brains of the family, never in any trouble. She was thinking about all of this when suddenly she felt a tug on her leg, she was pulled into the sea. The eerie darkness underneath the sea shocked the girl. She swam around, she spotted some fish which proceeded to swim with her. Her left foot was still being tugged on by whatever was taking her. She was overpowered and couldn’t swim anymore, she was gasping for air, the overwhelming events that had taken place over the last few seconds really shocked her. She was buried under the sea

Age: 10



It was a Monday morning at school again. Everyone hates Monday mornings in my school. For my entire life I wanted to be a swimmer. It was the 20th of November and the time was 6am, I decided to go for a swim in the sea. Something just didn’t feel right, it was dark and very misty. I had a very strange feeling. I went back to shore to pick up my lantern, as I turned around and the glow off the lantern hit the water, I could not believe what I could see…….

Age: 10


it all starts in the ocean with a little girl, or should I say little mermaid. well it started with her swimming in the ocean she swam and swam to the depth of the ocean where her and her family lives its weird because humans said for her to have no sort of fishy look just two scales on her face she protects well that’s the end of it

Age: 11



I am genifa I go swimming with my dad every weekend. There was a hole in the floor of the pool I said to my dad look dad there’s a hole. We carried on swimming and I swan one length I got my foot stuck in the hole and I shouted dad I’m drowning he said I’m coming I said help but bye the time he hot there I was gone. There we’re see animals everywhere I will enjoy it down hear anyway but what will I do no food no friends. Anyway 3 hours passed by I found a turtle friend he was friendly I miss my dad lots but I will eat the sea weed I will find another group of friends I’m sure the next day I came back up the hole and saw my dad I was so happy my mum and dad we’re there looking at the hole and crying so I pop out of the hole and say surprise I’m back they screen and cry even more I jump out and say hello I missed you I’m glad to see you

Age: 10




I wake up from my deep slumber. I slowly get out of the overturned, rusty cage that has kept me imprisoned for as long as I can remember. I pick up my ever glowing lantern as I set about stretching my legs.

“I should have done this a few thousand years ago,” I manage, my voice being gurgled by the on going flow of water.

Oblivious to the fish, big or small, I try to find my way around. After a while, I start to get used to moving my “leg” about. All of a sudden, I feel a pain that goes deep down to the bone. It seems to have come from at the bottom of my body. I look at my damaged Mermaid’s tail and decide to rest it. So I swim back to my cage, curling up into a ball and falling asleep.

I haven’t woken up yet…

Age: 10



One misty morning as I woke up I had a funny dream where I was walking through the hall and I heard a creek but it was only my Dad. He started walking towards me. I didn’t know what to do, but then he started to speak to me. Dad said “find that scroll, find it.” I reply “what scroll?” but by then he had all ready gone.

Age: 8


The girl and the lamp

It was a stormy day in 1896 when … Heidi set sail with her parents. They where leaving Timbuctoo to go to the enchanted kingdom. They were half way across codeye sea when … Heidi jumped in to see what the bright light was at the bottom of the ocean. And it was a bright firing roaring lantern and the lantern belonged to the mermaids of the sea. They used it so they could see were the crispy seaweed was that they loved for there tea. When they met Heidi they became very good friends with her they told Heidi a secret that the lamp was magical and she could have two wishes Heidi wished to be a mermaid for the day and and to take some crispy seaweed back to mum and dad for tea and both of her wishes came true!

Age: 8


There was a young girl who was called Emily and she loved myths about the sea. So when see had a couple of hours see went diving in the Caribbean. She took a lantern with her, so that she could see if there was anything valuable under the sea. She was looking for shark’s teeth or treasure, so Emily and her dad could afford a better house. Her mum had died in a car crash and it left her and her dad with little money as her dad was only a fisherman.

Suddenly she was surrounded by Manta Rays and her only option was to hide in a dark and gloomy cave. But then, out of the corner of her eye she saw an object and it appeared to be a treasure chest. She tried to carry it up to the surface but it was too much for her, so she whistled to the dolphins and they helped her carry it to the coast. She opened it and found emeralds, a lot of gold coins and a giant ruby. She sold them all at the market and made a lot of money and spent it on a better house and things they needed.

Age: 8


A ten-year-old girl was having an evening stroll down the grassy bank of lake Windermere when she saw an eerie glow in the depths of the lake about three metres away.

So she slowly waded in (only because she was inquisitive) then the water got too deep and the ground beneath her vanished. The water was freezing but she gathered herself together and dived down into the icy depths. Suddenly everything was black but then she caught sight of the light and swam towards it.

Age: 8



Here is a short story about how I discovered a talking fish. I was swimming through the sapphire sea with a lamp. There were amazing bizarre creatures swimming around me. Suddenly! I saw a cave. I swam near it and then I went inside it … TREASURE everywhere! As I swam into the dark gloomy cave, my lamp lit the rubies, gold and pearls, lighting a rainbow around me. But suddenly my blonde long hair got caught between the smooth rocks. I was determined to escape, even if it meant losing my beautiful beloved hair! Just then, my luck was in as a friendly, talking, weird fish swam into the cave. The pink spiky big eyed fish realised I was desperate to get away so she kindly untangled my hair quickly. The creature said “hello nice to meet you”. I replied “thank you, nice to meet you too”.

Age: 9



“Good night James!” cheered Hanna “Good night Hanna!” called James. Hanna was a kind girl she loved her little brother James.

Hanna went to sleep, she was very comfy and cozy that night, she woke up in a wonderful mood only to find that she wasn’t in her bed…she was on a sea bed!! She went to have a look around and noticed that she could speak and breathe under water. Then this fish came and started speaking to her. The fish said something about his friend Casper being stuck underneath a rock. Hanna said she would like to help. The two new friends swam to the little fish, luckily Hanna was a human so she was able to lift the rock. Now it was nighttime in the sea world and when Hanna woke up in the morning she was back in her own bed and it turned out it was all just a dream.

Age: 9


In the ocean a girl called Nancy had been made to walk the plank by Mully the pirate. She sunk to the bottom and saw a dark cave. Nancy swam into it and saw it was full of shiny jewels. On her way she saw the skeletons of the others who had walked the plank before but had not made it out alive.

She picked up a handful of glittering rubies and put them in the bag that the pirates had given her. Nancy turned to swim out of the cave but just then she felt a bony hand touching her bag. She slowly turned around and saw a SKELETON rip open her bag and the rubies scattered on the rocks.

Nancy managed to grab one ruby without the skeleton noticing and swam to the surface.

As she came up for air the pirates were waiting for their treasure.

Age: 9


My name is Sofia,

and I am on search for treasure, you may ask how I can breathe under water as I am human, but I stole some gills off a fish and now I can breathe under water and search what I am looking for. a wise old fisherman once told me if I ever get the chance of going to the mysterious land of arkor to look out for the 3 fragments of the core of aslon beneath this will be treasure and lots of it, but!!! there will be one problem auto pilot fish guard this area and the master Lucas is controlling them the only way to stop them is to use the light of the special admanita lantern I hold that was passed down from my Grandpa.

wish me luck guys I am feeling brave and hoping my gills will stay in place until I get to the mysterious land of arkor.

Age: 8


A girl was walking on the shore of the beach. It was night time and she had a lamp her Mum said it was waterproof. She was walking and a gust of wind threw her into the sea. It was cold and very ruff all of a sudden. When the sea calmed down she went for a swim in the middle of the night. It is a strange time to swim but she did it anyway. Then she realized she could breath under water. She saw a lovely sight she saw a clown fish and named him Nemo and went back to her parent’s for a lovely bath.

Age: 8



Tess was an eleven-year-old girl. One day she went diving with her friends. She had been waiting for this day to come for weeks, months… and maybe even years. Tess shot out of bed that day, rushed her breakfast got changed did all that stuff and stood by the door. After half an hour it was finally time to go. When she got there her friends were there all ready. When it was time they dived in. “Woooooooow!” they exclaimed. The sea was beautiful. Suddenly, Tess took a wrong turn. She was lost. She turned on her lantern and suddenly saw sharks surrounding her. She was not that exited now.

Age: 8

The Whale and Bella.
As the girl swam deep in the ocean looking for the exit out of the blue gloomy sea, she heard a noise, a noise of a whale, like an Orca.  

The Orca appeared and said “hi little one, what are you doing down here in the blue gloomy sea,”.  

The girl was amazed when she heard the Orca talk and she explained everything to the whale.  

“Well you see I was on the beach with my parents, and a big wave pulled me into the sea, and here I am,”.  

The girl started to cry, then the whale decided to help the girl, and they became friends.  

“My name is Bella,” whimpered the girl whilst she cleared her eyes.

“My name is just Whale,” said the Orca with depression.

The Orca hated his name he wanted something fancy, but Bella and Whale couldn’t decide quick enough, because…

Age: 11


Madeline had gone to visit her grandparents who lived by the sea. That night something strange happened it was a full moon and the water started to rise into the house.The water was lashing against the door and windows trying to get in.Suddenly all the water rushed into the house and flooded all the rooms.To Madeline’s surprise she was able to breathe .Although it was cold and dark she could see because of the lamp off her bed side table.She went off exploring the house looking for her grandparents. To her amazement they to could breathe under water and were having a party with her family. So she joined in as a family tradition.
Age: 8

My amazing adventure started when I sat down at my dressing table to brush my hair. I realised that the reflection looking back at me wasn’t mine. I reached forward to touch the glass and it turned to water beneath my fingers. Before I knew it I had stepped through into a mysterious underwater world. Beside me was a lantern which I picked up to help me explore this strange new place. As I swam along my attention was drawn towards an old shipwreck lying on the sea bed. At first I thought I was alone, but then I noticed that a dolphin was playfully swimming along beside me. We swam together towards the shipwreck and started to explore. It must have been a big boat as there was lots to explore and I was able to imagine how amazing this boat must have been. Something shiny caught my eye and we both squeezed through a tight space towards it. To my surprise I found a chest full of gold coins and other treasures. Maybe this was pirate loot! I slipped one gold coin into my pocket and decided it was time to leave but that was not going to be so easy. When I tried to swim out the same way my dress got caught on an old rusty nail. I tried desperately to free myself but couldn’t. Just as I was starting to panic I felt something pushing me from behind. It was my dolphin friend! With one gigantic push it freed me and with relief we both left the ship. We spent a little more time exploring this exotic world, looking at wonderful fish and sea creatures. All of a sudden I heard a voice calling me. It sounded like my mother! The voice got louder and louder which seemed to echo around me. All of a sudden I woke in my own bed at home. It took me a moment to realise that my amazing underwater adventure was really just a dream. But as I sat up in bed I felt something cold and hard in my hand. When I opened my hand I saw to my surprise a beautiful gold coin so was it all a dream or was it real?

Age: 9


I cannot bring myself to imagine I am under the mysterious sea seeking for my long lost mother. Just to think that this morning I was told where she was all along, by my grandpa. 
       I was only nine when she left; lots of questions spun around my head, making me perplexed. My father passed away in the war, that’s when my mother disappeared.

       My grandpa finally told me the hidden secret; that my mother was a mermaid and needed to go back to her kingdom. When my grandpa confessed to me, I felt a mixture of emotions, I didn’t know whether to cry or be furious. My face must have not had any expression at all.  So here I am under the sea anxiously looking for my mother; I inherited her quality to breathe underwater. As I swim further, a kingdom slowly forms in front of my startled eyes.

Age: 10

There was a girl who dreams of being a mermaid .And her mum thought that it was to dangros so she did not not spend time after she said that . She loved dolting and she wanted to swim with them in greas but she was poor and she ate mud and pig. But there was one thing she did like and thats being helpfull and helping sea animals. But she loved having food aswell and talling dolting and the wied thing is that they have a frened relashinonship with the oteas as well 
One night she wished to go to greece and the next moring she was uder water with doltings and she woken up with a tall and she did not like what was haping becuse she cold not swim and she was trired but then she sore a person but she never new that it was her mum
Age: 10


As i dive in to the cold dark ocean i feel a cold breeze running through me as i light a lamp i see everything . my lamp does not get dimmer . 

all around me there is multicoulred fish of all speicies . as i land on the ocean ground i see a door is i slowly .. carefully walk the door opens as i begin to turn back ,. i wonder how i got here in the first place maybe im not a human i might be a murmaid . what i always wanted to be but shhh dont tell any one at al and…………………..
Age 10


One minute I was holding the old lantern next the monster wave pulled me under. I closed my eyes waiting for something to happen but nothing did. I was still conscious after about 5 minutes of sinking into the dark depths of the sea.

Flickers of light came to my eyes, I opened them. The lantern was still lit. Then I realised I was breathing. It was all a blur at first then I could see fish swimming round. I swam for what seemed like hours looking at the wonders of the sea. I came to a ship wreck the eeriness of the sea hit me as I passed through the grimy beams. I saw a light quite close. As I got closer I could see a dark figure. It was a human a human boy. He had the same lantern 

Now me and the boy swim round every corner of the sea. We are the children of the sea.

Age: 11
The girl swims under water, as the lantern shines the way like a dangler fish. She swims calm and peacefully without bothering the fish, exploring and looking for treasure. Having no sharks chasing her she’s safe from being devoured. Or is she?
Age: 10

As the girl of the sea swims down the town of Sinon Omsvile wishes to go home, well she does not have a lot of memorys of land. They stopped sending out massive search party 2 years ago sines are island sank 3 years ago. they sent out massive search ships and guess what they haven’t even found us.I bet you are thinking how I can I breath under water, well we all were injected before we sunk with an secret formula by a government experiment to breath underwater, half human half fish, for when are island sunk because of an earthquake. My nextdoor neighbour does not like water,he is always complaining about being wet, but I do ,and fish fascinating things they are no arms no legs just yousin there body to move.

Age: 10


The young girl logs onto the old,slow loading laptop, she opens up a page and types in ‘russbrownauthor’ she then logs onto her teachers website. She starts to write.

             ‘Dear Diary’ she starts the story.She thinks about how she wants her story to be different so she looks deeply into the eyes of the girl whom she is mean to write about,She knows what to right.’there is a girl in my class at school,year 6 and this girl’ she thinks of her friends Ellie Emily Molly etc… She chooses Ellie ‘now Ellie is just weird she actually swims to school and she’s under there for hours, i just don’t understand, its insane,unnatural .She is a nutter, she is a frea… SSSHHHHHH water everywhere,and the girl died’ the girl,now satisfied,went to bed and dreamed of her special route to school,through the water…
Age: 11

This little girl loved swimming under the sea. One day the girl ran away from home she hated her parents and she had no family members because they had all died so she remembered her fish tank she loved fish. They were her best friends she hadn’t seen them in a while the first thing that popped into her head was I’ll go live with the fish they’ll want me.

So she went and lived with the fish bearing in mind that it was 9:59 it was dark luckily she remembered she packed a lamp she went under water with a lantern still lit she swam and swam and swam life was amazing ( at that point ) until her parents found out were she had gone they came looking for her the next day but unfortunately they found her dead on the sand they were devastated.

Age: 10
A girl was on a mountain. Her name was Charlotte, she had brown hair that flowed in the wind. Charlotte ran down the mountain and a flash of light flew across her face. She quickly turned around, it moved like it was dancing across the sky. She chased it to the sea, Charlotte snatched a lamp from a boat. She jumped into the sea, at the same time she caught the dancing light but in fury the light trapped both of them under water for eternity. Until a boy named George, saw her and rescued her from the spell. Both of them suddenly fell in love and they travelled the world. The dancing light has never been seen since so if you see a dancing light don’t chase it.

Age: 10

One day on a tropical island a girl called Sophie longed to be back on the mainland with all the rest of the people in the world rather than being on island by herself even though is was a lovely site she still wanted to go home. If your wondering how she got there well this is how it began
Sophie and her family were flying to South America when suddenly the pilot said “fasten up we will be having some turbulence” but it wasn’t, it was the engines over heating.In a sudden moment the plane was going down and it crashed down into the sea and Sophie was the only one to survive. 
So she tries to find a way to get home her latest attempt was swimming away but It never work.

Her final attempt was to build a raft with a sail and of she went into the distance in search of rescue.
Age: 10

Jessica b
One day me and my family went on a boat trip . We sank I felt really scared and swam to the closest island.IT was a mythical island called Mako island.There was spiders and poisonous snakes.Suddenly something darted right at me.I stopped walking, for a minute I thought it was a shark but sharks can’t live put of water can they?I turned around it was a, SHARKMAN.I ran but slipped down a hole in the rocks.Sometime later I found a cave with astonishingly glowing blue water.I slipped into the water it started bubbling and I magically turned into a mermaid.A tale fins.I seem threw the ocean and turned to my natural self.

Age: 8

Story Starts October 16th 2015


We are back!! After far too long away we have restarted the story starts activity and here it is. A small amount this month but it will get better! Please leave a comment or two and if you haven’t tried before…GET WRITING!

Once,lived a dragon named spike who liked to see the large castle everyday. But a knight called Mike stopped him and tried to kill him . spike took out some of his teeth and killed the knight by using the tooth as a whole broomstick and chucked it up the Knight’s nose! The end.



In a faraway town people were admiring there work. Night  came, and it glowed. Their castle. The child would be  born tomorrow. It was, and it wasn’t a boy but a girl. Princess Sydney. She grew and was loved until one day; The doors closed. Night fell and light didn’t recover. Years past as this monster figure blotted out the sun. The doors to the castle started to disappear and no one could enter. Then a dragon, its head the size of Germany, landed. It said it was sent from space to deliver a message. A message of death. It said it needed food, Royal food. He needed the Princess. She was growing; she was 13 now and didn’t want to get eaten. She stood her ground and challenged the dragon to a dual. The princess disappeared. There then gone. No one found her, and the dragon smiled and left.


Everything was peaceful in Disneyland. The birds sang in the trees, the sun descended above the town in the brilliant blue sky shining happiness across the land, harmoniously.
Inside the palace the King, Queen and their Daughters, Evie and Rosie; were having breakfast at their vast dining table with no worry in the air.
Until it suddenly began to grow dark and all of them worries suddenly began to replace the happy atmosphere with a tense one. A great dragon’s head peered through the dining room window and the family looked back at it in monstrosity. They recognised immediately that it was maleficent.
The King was furious, they had had a numerous amount of mishaps with maleficent before and they always ended the same way, the kingdom needed endless repairing to be done. Everybody was petrified, Rosie and Evie screamed and hid.
Disney land was never the same after that occurence.



The creepy dragon loomed over everyone like a giant lizard. It’s great, orange eyes illuminated in the dark. The dragon’s scaly skin was the colour green as it was covered with seaweed. But, if you look really close you can see that it is actually purple. What were its origins? No one knows anything about it apart from the fact that one day he just majestically appeared out of nowhere. It landed on top of an old attraction at Disneyland, Florida.
Then, all of a sudden, it just disappeared. The great, towering dragon had just disappeared. Nobody could think of an explanation. After all, why would a massive beast of a dragon that had been sitting there for so many years just suddenly decide to disappear? It just didn’t make sense.
Eventually, people stopped inquiring and the whole thing was soon forgotten about it. But, someone knew what had happened…


Far far away in a deserted kingdom there was a new castle. A royal family recently moved into the grand and sparkling castle on the far end of the dark coast! The family moved there for a few long weeks but the princess couldn’t settle in. She had a funny feeling it was haunted!
The king and queen were angry with the princess and told her not to be silly.
The princess decided to run back to her old kingdom. Just as she reached the end of the deserted kingdom she felt a warm breathe on the back of her neck…
Suddenly some sharp teeth viciously lifted her off the ground and gulped her down in one. The ferocious beast ran to the castle and destroyed it and everything inside it.
Weeks later builders produced another sparkling castle and a new royal family are moving in…



Story start Nov 1st- Nov 7th


This weeks picture was of the ruins in Furness Abby, Cumbria. This sent children writing superb detailed descriptive work. Have a read and please leave a comment.

Libby Macaulay 10

This is not just an old wrecked building it’s a haunted wrecked building. its haunted by monks not the nice kind the bad kind this is the story of why they haunt it and why they are bad.
It started of in 1616 when a group of men became monks they weren’t the best monks they weren’t even religious they just pretended to be. They give them selves a name it was the r monks. There was a group of very good monks very popular monks every body loved them and they made fun of the new group of monks because they didn’t know any thing.
The r monks started to get fed-up and started spreading rumors about the other group. They spread rumors for months and months and the other group was getting laughed at by everybody else. The monks had enough and started a fight with the r monks.

Hannah Warne 10

As I silently crept through the misty rubble of the monastery a storm began to stir. The wind thrashing, snapping many tree’s in its way .I dived for shelter in the gloomiest part of the rubble. Oh what a wonderful sight, shelter.
A monk appeared out of nowhere then it evaporated into the mist. “Wait” I whispered .But to no avail he had gone! The storm grew impatient a swirling twister appeared .whilst I ran I heard an everlasting moan. “The monk” I thought. Then the monk spoke “head for the remaining monastery”. A huge rock tumbled in front of me crushing me.
Now I linger by my grave as a ghost my memories fatal and cruel. I morn of the day I lost my life to curiosity and adventure! My family mourn for me most of the time. That monk is lost forever, he had tried to save my life.

Emily 9

As they hid behind the castle wreck, they did not dare to look what was in front of them. Scared as ever they ran for their lives, before they could even look at the spirit haunting the village. Knowing that they would not live to tell the tale if they stopped running, In the ruins of the castle. They were screaming and crying but no one was there to help. But then suddenly a figure popped out with a hooded cloak on. He grabbed them and threw them in his car. They were asking so many questions, that they did not even know what was happening.


Tali 10

Me and my friend (Isabelle) went out in the woods, mucking about and finding different things to mess with. We were just making dens when we heard a big bang and another and another. Through the trees we ran, to have a peek what was going on. Finally the gigantic bundle of trees ended with a steep hill. Isabelle and I went tumbling down the slant landing in a pile of mud. I clambered up, quickly helping Isabelle up to stand. Our sight was amazing, magnificent should I say. The crumbling walls clattered on the ground meanwhile nature was taking over. We were gobsmacked at the sight of a building that could have been in good condition but instead left to rot away in the middle of nowhere. We staggered round the building eventually finding the doorway. We stared right into the dark black hole. We stepped forward …


Lillie H 10

I was looking around this old destroyed building I was waiting for my friend Isabelle to arrive. Where going to be explorers for the day, Isabelle eventually came we were walking very slowly, and carefully just to make sure we don’t go past any buried valuable treasure.
We were touching all of the walls and then suddenly Isabelle was walking around the other side of the wall and then I shouted HELP!! HELP!!!! . My leg was stuck fast, I couldn’t move!

Isabelle rushed around she was panicking her heart pounding with shock and she went to call for HELP!!! No-one heard her so she decided to pull, she pulled and pulled until eventually, I got out and then I said thanks.

Hannah A 10

Me and my friend Milly were going for a walk , we came to a big rusty dull gate I tried to push it open but it was locked and then I saw a women peek round the door of the house she looked familiar she came to the gate and said ‘’what do you want ’’she had a squeaky voice a shiver ran down my spine ‘’oh nothing sorry to bother you’’ I said and started to walk on and then I heard the lady say ‘’ why is this gate locked ‘’ and she opened I crept back in and seen a wrecked house it started to get colder and colder and that women was there again laughing .My friend Milly said ‘’I’m not scared of you ‘’ she swung towards us aaaarrrr…

Joshua Newburn 10

One day there was a pair of little kids about 10 to a 11 year old kids exploring the champers of torturing they were call Jeff and Harold as they walked in they were really frightened in case they get a piece of sting tied around there neck because they saw people with a blue and purple face from hanging them selves.They found some tools like a sword ,knives and a stick with nails in the weapon to torture them for doing some thing really horrible or tried to assassinate some one like the king or queen they started walking around looking at the dead people on the wooden crate and strapped on the wooden crate with a metal circle and the put a rat in it and it starts to go into your ears , mouth or your hair and other unpleasant places on your body on purpose.

Ben Walkden 10

With my heart beating faster than lighting I strolled through the dark archway. I could sense something bad happening. I sprinted down the corridor and then finally, there was a window. I climbed out from the dark and dim building not looking down at my landing. I fell into a cave. I could hear my footsteps echo as I heard water dripping come closer and closer. I wanted to get out of the frightening cave but it was beckoning me to go further. I couldn’t resist so I began to investigate. Suddenly a shady figure appeared just a few feet away from me. I couldn’t tell whether or not it was human but one thing I realised was that if I turned and ran away I would get a chase so it must be better to face it now and get it over with. BANG! Went a sound from behind.

Oliver Neatis 11

As I watched my son walk slowly into the dark forest I wondered what I could of done that would save my life when I was where he was. The path was disappearing in every step I took; things were starting to get creepy. A storm grew, inky black eyes stared into his soul and in the distance, glowing red eyes flickered in the darkness a tiger had arrived.
He ran left with thorns scratching his face making him cry until he came to an old building, I could tell it was beckoning him in. He walked closer, closer to his doom, steel doors blocked his way, he could see the tiger coming towards him, he ran at them as hard as he could and the hinges screamed a deafening scream, he finally opened it after several moans from the door, when he got in no one saw him again.

Sam Facer 11

So here is a piece of my home the abbey it all started 200 hundred years ago I was born in to a catholic family it was pretty normal family we went to church every Sunday. My farther Eric Smith, worked on the local farm for money . one day he said we are sending you to an abbey this was a great thing at the time but when the day came to go I was petrified I’ve never been that far from home before as soon as we past the farmers home that would be the longest I’ve been from home .

We arrived in the cart just out side the abbey my farther was not coming in I was heartfelt I would never see him a gain me and him were pretty closes it was horrible so 50 years past and I died on the 15 of may 1690 I was in seventies.

Katie 10

I went for a drive with my mum and dad .Until we saw something, something strange, something rather old .We all stared at the field .Did any wane know about this place? Why was it their? what is it? the answer is know wane knows those questions. We all glared at the figure until my dad remembered some thing about king Henry v111.”king Henry v111 took this building from the monks know one knows why but he did the monks were rich that is why I think he stole all their things” said my dad. Suddenly I saw a wight glow it was a man in a robe and was carrying a bell for some reason he turned at us we cold tell he was a monk ghost he looked rather strange he looked at me with his cold dead eyes. Were was he going? What was he doing ? weal never know.

Oliver 10

One night I went out on my skateboard all the way to a big skate-park but then I heard some crumbling in the rocks across the field I saw with my own eyes someone taking stone up from the ground and they were climbing down some kind of a tunnel or a hole so I told my friend to come with me and have a fun adventure. He said” no I’m not going to get myself killed” I said don’t be stupid you’re not going to die lets go. Ok let’s go my friend replied so me and my friend went to the castle looking thing so we had to climb threw a load of rocks and we climbed all the way to the place where the people climbed down so we both lifted the rock’s and then climbed down and we found mine carts filled with gold and iron.

Elliot D 11

My heart was beating wildly as I hid behind an old oak tree. I could see a dark misty figure in the old ruin it looked like a monk I was frightened 0what was he going to do? Was he going to hurt me? Between the ruin there was a horse and carriage it was mysterious but wicked. I took a step back and tripped over a huge rock that I did not see, it was not there before. “Was machst du hier? I couldn’t tell what  he was saying so his friend in the horse carriage to translate. He said “He is German, and he said what are you doing here? He came up to me I was frightened, He told me to scram and get of his land I know what he was saying because the man in the carriage translated it to me. I did so.

Cory Tucker 10

One day there was a ice cream van in a field so I decided to go and get one with a flake. When I walked off I saw a old rotten, disgusting building in the distance so I decided to go and have a look what was in there. When I got in there I saw two kids messing around so I told them to get out and they ran off so I started walking around the building to see if I can find anything. When I went into the next room I saw some money in a bag so I walked further in to the building to see if I could find any other good stuff. I I kept walking then I saw some skulls at the end of the building and very old clothes then I saw some legs and some more skulls in the corner then I found some very bright gold treasure.

Poppy jai Muir 10

This is not just an old wrecked building this is a story in itself. I found this enchanted place when I was practicing for the big marathon. The big marathon is on every year I have run the marathon 5 times I’ve done it since I was ten I’m now fifteen. I like to practice on different surfaces like one day id jog on cobble and one day on mud. This just helps because there not always in the same place. I found this place while practicing on a muddy surface. You see those trees on the left? I was just behind them when I spotted it. As soon as I spotted it I leapt towards it. When I got to the front of the wreck I decided to climb in to the window and then suddenly…

Izzy 10

I stumbled to a clearing and before my eyes appeared an abandoned castle. It had an eerie feeling about it. As I stepped forward the leaves crunched beneath my feet. The wind whistled through my ears as I touched the mossy walls of the building .I peered through the window and couldn’t believe my eyes a dark figure strolled across the room. I felt a force pull me to the ground my heart was pounding. I felt like I was being watched, I didn’t dare to open my eyes for if someone was staring at me. I lay there in silence waiting until I heard a loud scream it sent a chill up my spine I finally found the courage to open my eyes. I screamed as I found a black figure standing over me.

Eve Charlotte Budden 10

As I walked down the lane I could smell the soggy smell of rain I had to be careful that I didn’t slip. I sore a building I thought it was a castle. Suddenly I heard a voice “ha ha ha.” It was coming from behind the wrecked building. I said “hello.” Then one of the bricks moved and I ran back up the lane a slipped on the gooey moss and grazed my knee. Suddenly a shadowy figure darted to me I tried to scramble back up the lane but I couldn’t it was too painful. It came closer and whispered “I’m the ghost of the Abby.” Suddenly my mum shouted me for tea and the ghost disappeared. I went home.

Tyler Bolton 10

Dear anybody

Five weeks ago I was playing out with Billy at the old church. We saw something in the trees.
Me and Billy wanted to follow it like an idiot. But as soon as he saw me and Billy it ran at us. Me and
Me and billy ran and ran we couldn’t work out what it was but we knew it was very scary.
We found a little old house in the woods. We ran into the little house in the woods I locked the door.

I am writing this letter so you might be able to call the police or something please help us.

Nathan Johnson 10

It was a cold day, I was playing with my friends. We were playing hide and seek. I jumped though a window from part of the old and broken abbey. I was hidden in a corner but I fell down a hole. I found a cave with skeletons in it. I conveniently had a torch so I had a look around. I was calling out to see if anyone was there. I found a chest so I opened it . It was shining bright and it was filled with diamonds and gold. I called my friends and they through down a rope. We pulled the treasure and lived a rich life.

Ethan Lee Nicolson 10

Dear diary today I saw a ruined building being dug up I look at what they were digging up I saw a skull and I was terrified I ran home and I hide under my covers . I got my laptop and started to research so I asked my mum what the building was called she said it was called St George’s church there was a rumor about a priest buried alive under the floor . WAS IT HIS SKULL!?

Calum Macpherson 11

dear diary I saw a rewind building that was built in the olden days called the Furness building and it was built 1235 and destroyed in the 1576. It was well known as the church whit a priest got buried in a priest whole when the soldiers knocked on the door or they would block them in for forever and out side a stick with spick on the end the priests head but if they hidden that would not happen.

Ronnie 10

I walked up the Abbey but I was terrified shocked, horrified and scared. I’m feeling weird, my vision goes swirling. I faint on the ground into a strange nightmare and a new world ‘were on earth am I’! I shouted. ‘why can’t I wake up’!

Kieran 10

I walked around my dream house but I wish I never came because I can never leave I’m trapped to die I thought. Why me not a bank robber I screamed for help I never saw the light after that day I live with ghost’s will I die?Bang ! The house fell with a crash I thought it couldn’t get any worse.Did I die can I live I saw Shrek yes I’m dead what will happen next…

Savannah Rose Sharp 11

As I walked through the forest it was dark and spooky, the bare branches scratched my face. As I walk to the top I saw an old castle. I walked into it.It was very old and felt as if it was going to fall dawn. When I was walking and it felt like walking in a maze. I finally got to the middle, and something blown into my face it was like it was glowing.
Something or someone pushed me into it.I banged my head and it took me a while to get back to normal I picked it up and it was lot of lot of gold I giggled but I didn’t know what to do with it. I hear a little voice echo in the back ground then I saw a shadow come forward. “do you want some money?” And we were the best of friend forever.

Lochlan Gosling 10

One day when I was walking to my friend’s  house.I was getting tired so I tuck a short cut through the woods and I soon discovered a small house that looked like it had been left for a long time. I walked up to it and then I heard a small crackle in the back ground so I got closer and closer and closer. Then a small gremlin like man that shouted at me to go away but I was so star struck that I ignored him. He started getting angry so I tried walking off but he grabbed me and said “actually stay and you can be my servant for the rest of your life”. I tried to run off but he stabbed some kind of weird medicine that made me instantly fall to sleep.  When I woke up  I knew I was going to be here for a long time.

Dolcie Rowling 7

A long time ago there lived a poor King who lived in a tiny castle. He lived alone even though he was a King. One day he found a sack of money he used to repair his house and get servants. They did not call the poor King poor any more they called him the rich King. Now his castle had one hundred doors, seven hundred windows and seven hundred rooms. He decided to look in his money room one day but all his money had gone. He looked in a bedroom it looked nice but a little girl was going crazy in there. She wasn’t doing anything wrong so the King became her friend. She dreamed of being the Princess of the castle.

Harvey Kemp 7

One day there was a mad scientist, he made a potion that was meant to turn him invincible but it turned him into a horrible ‘Grim Reaper’ and since then anyone who enters get haunted for the rest of their lives…
One day a seventeen year old boy came to the haunted house. As he walked in with his dog he heard a loud scream, the teenager followed the sounds of screams. The closer he got the more screams he could hear…Suddenly he heard voices of the people who entered before him. They said “Go back! run while you can!!”
The teenager was terrified but he continued…

Casey 10

Melanie Grace stood at the edge of the forest, looking at the remains of her Great Granddads chapel. It was the year 1932 and three years ago, her Granddad’s building was set fire to by someone the police couldn’t track down, killing 32 people inside including her Great Granddad. A sudden flash of lightning occurred and there stood a woman wearing a black gown and had long black hair. Melanie thought this was the woman that had set fire to the chapel, so she ran out and hid inside the spooky church. In almost seconds, the woman had gone, but a fire was spreading quickly through the chapel. She didn’t say a word, for she was ready to join her Great Granddad, away from her life altogether…

Only two adult entries this week, I think the children’s quality of work is scaring you off! #getwriting adults!!!

Andy 49

“Simon! Where are you?” called Maria,
“In here. Come and see what I’ve found.”
Maria walked round the end of the church to the archway that had once housed the door. In the nave looking at something small and black, stood her brother.
“What is it?” asked Maria warily.
“I’m not sure. Looks like a chess piece. Could be a bishop, but it’s more like a monk.”
“Where did you find it?” said Maria moving closer.
“It was behind that stone, hidden in the wall.”
Maria looked down and saw a small, dressed stone lying on the floor beneath a black gaping hole.
“I was climbing the wall to call you through the window dislodged it. I tried to push it back but it jammed on something. When I looked again I saw this figure.”
Maria looked at it and shivered.
“I don’t like it. It gives me the creeps.”

Neil 65

Fatigue made me stop. Nothing else. I was hungry; hadn’t eaten for days. I wasn’t thirsty … it’d been raining and I was wet through. The old church still had a roof and I couldn’t take another step. I don’t like religion, don’t believe in god but I didn’t think a derelict building would mind. I was wrong about that. And when I crawled into an anteroom to shelter from the rain, I thought nothing could harm me. I was wrong about that too.

It was the bell that woke me, booming, dragging me out of sleep in the dark. Then it stopped. I could hear voices, feet shuffling. A door, that wasn’t there when I went to sleep, creaked open. A figure in a robe, holding a candle, stood in the doorway.

‘It’s time for the funeral,’ said a wisp of a voice.

‘Funeral?’ I croaked, uncertain. Looking down in confusion, I saw I was wearing a robe too.
‘What do you mean?’ I asked. ‘Whose funeral?’

‘Why yours, of course,’ came the reply.

A great start

Thought I would start my new blog with a wonderful set of reviews I received from a reader in Australia.
It is emails like these that make my job/hobby worth doing. Thank you Louise!

Poppy’s Planet is a delightful book that will engage readers of all ages. Written in beautiful prose, Poppy’s tale is a simple but inspiring plea to protect our world. Supported by fabulous illustrations by the amazing Jamie Cosley, Poppy tells her story in language that is easy to understand but powerful in its message. It is easy to see this book being shared in classrooms as a springboard to explore how we treat our environment and make positive steps both locally and globally to make changes to benefit our world. This cute little penguin will win the hearts of her readers and put a smile on everyone’s face. It is a book that is meant to be shared and discussed and as a teacher librarian I recommend its inclusion in any library collection.

Daisy the Donkey

Russ Brown has told a familiar story from a very unique viewpoint. It is Daisy’s time to shine and she does so in a very quiet and peaceful way – reflective of her gentle nature. How can one repay kindness? Children will fall in love with Daisy as they learn the story of the Nativity from a different perspective. I highly recommend this book either as that special book to share with a little one or as a book that will open a door for a class to explore the question ‘What is greatness?’ Let Daisy take you on a journey of love that comes straight from the heart.

Louise Brooks.

So what can I say! These are genuine independent reviews and have really made my weekend. Both books are available via my website and amazon and are available on kindle and nook.

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